article I wrote for other site

[Dwinsgames]

feel free to critique / give pointers etc

figured it was draft oriented enough to place here , if moderation thinks otherwise feel free to delete thread as I am not trying nor intend to use this site as an advertisement for another site ..

http://www.topsportsreport.com/score...s-paul-hunter/

[Shoes]

Getting an error message.

[Dwinsgames]

Getting an error message.

they moved it ...grrr link updated

but ohhhh its front page now

[Shoes]

Good stuff, Dwins. Someone mail this article to Tomlin and the FO! Nice props for *Goose Wallace*.

[Dwinsgames]

Good stuff, Dwins. Someone mail this article to Tomlin and the FO! Nice props for *Goose Wallace*.

Tomlin is on twitter , but I am not sending it to him lol

[Shoes]

Tomlin is on twitter , but I am not sending it to him lol

Well I hope someone does!

[Dwinsgames]

Well I hope someone does!

I am guessing it won't happen and even if it did he wouldn't read it

[tube517]

Good stuff, Dwins. Someone mail this article to Tomlin and the FO! Nice props for *Goose Wallace*.

This ^^^. Especially "Goose" Wallace.

[blackngldblood]

Good stuff Dwins!


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[Psycho Ward 86]

I like the material, but definitely a lot of run on sentences and paraphrasing that should be fixed to make it look more professional. Good start otherwise.

[Dwinsgames]

I like the material, but definitely a lot of run on sentences and paraphrasing that should be fixed to make it look more professional. Good start otherwise.

thanks ...

yea so much for the editing , I was told would be done and not to worry about it or I would have been more diligent in fixing some of the issues myself ..

going to try using a writing program next go around , I typed that up in notepad because I was told not to worry about it -